Nowadays, more and more people from different cities are spending more time away from their families. What are the possible reasons and the effects on the people themselves and their families?
Today, the modern world has emerged to be more open than ever before, and actually, that affects families to be separated. Relatives could hardly find a chance to gather their family. In
this
essay, the potential factors that prevent their unity and the possible consequences of it Linking Words
would
be examined.
Wrong verb form
will
To begin
with, Linking Words
due to
the process of globalisation, each of us is allowed to travel around the world easily for a job or Linking Words
for changing
our lives. Obviously, work takes almost a third of our everyday time. Change preposition
to change
However
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while
a person who works in an international company is forced to frequent job trips to other countries, it is usually much more than 8 hours per day. Linking Words
Besides
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this
, virtually every other person living in Linking Words
suburbs
Correct article usage
the suburbs
move
to metropolises. Indeed, large cities present plenty of opportunities in terms of both, work and education. Correct subject-verb agreement
moves
Therefore
, especially the young generation abandons their hometowns in order to acquire a decent education or job. Linking Words
As a result
, people barely have the opportunity to be at home with their families.
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Such
a trend could be associated with many dire consequences for mental health and family unity. Given the fact that people spend a considerable amount of time apart from their relatives, a lack of interaction and communication might yield a feeling of constant isolation and loneliness and, Linking Words
thus
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being damaging
Wrong verb form
damage
for
a Change preposition
to
person
mind. Change noun form
person's
Moreover
, family members’ bonds are deteriorating. Having only an annual meeting as a traditional dinner, Linking Words
for example
, relatives could barely replace their potential everyday connection.
In conclusion, the modern way of living impedes the house to be close-knit. Linking Words
While
families are deprived of a profound amount of time with the closest people in the world, there are ramifications that tend to complicate households to be united.Linking Words
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