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some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific researches, business and the academic world. others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #business #world
Sharing
knowledge
 for free or not is one of the biggest concerns issue these days. Several
people
 think sharing as much
information
 and data about the scientific areas, trading and the academic world should be possible and accessible.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that they are invaluable and significantly important to share without any charges. In my point of view,
everyone
 has the right to have access to any kind of
information
. Many scientists and researchers spend a huge time and invest
money
 for pushing back the border of
knowledge
.
People
 think gathering
information
 and upgrade
knowledge
 should have cost.
For example
, they believe if you cost for something you should be grateful and it will be possible by costing
money
.
In addition
, paying
money
 could encourage scientists to search hardly because of earning
money
 and living. ,
Moreover
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 it helps to enhance science. In strike contrast, other
people
 are insisting
on
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that
everyone
 has a right to be aware of everything.
Furthermore
, if it has the amount of cost it would not be able for
everyone
 to receive
information
. Not only can awareness transfer between all
people
 around the world, and the cause of
this
 fact can improve culturazilation, but
also
 even
people
 of underdevelopment countries can upskill their insights. In my opinion,
everyone
 in the universe should have accessibility to all kinds of
knowledge
 and they should be aware of everything that they want. If they want to support scientists, the government should pay them or give them some facilities not normal
people
. In conclusion, there are two points of view about
knowledge
 would be freely or not. I broadly agree with
this
 idea which it should be free without any obstacle. It must be a rule and the government should introduce that awareness is a right of
people
.
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