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Nowadays the differences between countries are becoming less evident because we see the same TV shows, advertisements, fashion and follow the same brands. To what extent the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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Due to the advancement of technology, the
world
 has become one big place.
People
 are viewing the same shows, they are using the same social media sites, and they have the same sense of fashion. There are some benefits and drawbacks to
this
 trend, and I will explain why I believe the benefits far outweigh the negatives. Nowadays,
people
 from all over the
world
 are more similar to each other than ever before. There are
plethora
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 of advantages to
this
.
Firstly
,
people
 will understand each other more. They are more aware of other cultures, thanks to the diversity of actors on the tv shows,
people
 are able to see the cultures and habits of TV stars on the other side of the
world
.
In addition
, regardless of where
people
 live in the
world
, they will begin to have similar views. Because they have the same idols that they love and imitate, they will start to become more alike, and eventually have similar views.
This
 will reduce the conflict globally.
However
, there are some disadvantages to
this
 phenomenon. Before, countries had unique
identity
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 and
culture
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cultures
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.
People
 would enjoy travelling because they would be fascinated by the different cultures and habits. They would try new cuisines and explore the unique architecture.
However
,
this
 is no longer the case, now
majority
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 of European countries speak English, eat
cheese burgers
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 and the public wears the same brands. The special identity is lost. I think in the near future
this
 may cause identity crises in the upcoming generations. In conclusion,
although
 there are some disadvantages to the
world
 becoming one homogenous place, I think the benefits overshadow the negatives.
This
 way, the conflict between countries will decrease.
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