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The Government’s investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public service instead. To what extend do you agree with this statement?

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The role of the government and its main duties have been arguing for a long time.
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 some believe that authorities are only responsible to construct the infrastructure of the countries
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 as building roads, hospitals, schools, bridges, others claim that
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 are responsible to invest in public
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 like theatre, music, dancing, cinema, and sports activities as well. The main policy of the
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 is to provide basic
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 in order to create sustainability
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 the community. These main
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 are crucial for controlling and organising societies.
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 construct the infrastructure of the cities like drainages of the wastes, building roads and bridges to transport commodities, and construct schools in order to increase the quality of the society.
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,
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 ensure military
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 for purpose of the security.
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, support arts to thrive moods and emotions of the society and to block public conflict. I consider, providing social
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 as important as public
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 because they influence
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 of the populations and provide togetherness. To illustrate, the world has experienced numerous examples of destructions of fully and technologically built empires. In
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 context, I strongly believe that arts co-operate and contribute to societies to build a strong future. In fact, the
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 can bear the cost of the investments in social activities. İn conclusion, the countries cannot be a society with only providing
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 because some denominators are needed to build a common soul. Obviously, social
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 are able to construct strong societies. If
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 desire sustainable populations, they should fund arts like painting, singing, and theatre.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • cultural diversity
  • economic growth
  • creative industries
  • public service
  • community cohesion
  • opportunity cost
  • essential services
  • government spending
  • private sector
  • patronage
  • subsidize
  • invest
  • allocate
  • infrastructure
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