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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
A number of persons these
days
 believe we have so many
choices
 to make, I strongly agree with
this
 and will be discussing my reasons in
this
 essay. One of the reasons why I agree that we have too many
choices
 is due to the fast increase in the availability of information in form of
internet
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.
People
 now have
a
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vast access to information from the
internet
 which opens them up to many
choices
 they have to pick from.
For example
, in those
days
,
people
 are familiar with the kind of foods that are native to their environment and culture but nowadays
people
 are able to learn how to cook other foods from other cultures and countries because they can find a step by step process to of cooking on the
internet
 and
this
 gives them plenty of
choices
 to make as regards to that. Another reason I feel there are multiple
choices
 these
days
 is the high rise in the recent technological age. There is now a technological alternative to almost everything these
days
,
for example
; examinations used to be taken in form of paper and pencil/pen in those
days
 but now
computer based
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 have become an alternative.
Also
, interviews used to be conducted physically but lately, interviews can be done via Skype and these are
choices
 that
needs
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 to be made now that
initially
 used to be
a
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one-way. In conclusion, many
people
 these
days
 feel we have so many
choices
 to make and I agree
to
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 it strongly because there is a vast variety of
informations
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information
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 on the
internet
 and a rise in technological changes gives
people
 alternative
choices
 to make.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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