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The widespread use of the internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems connected with using the web? what solutions can you suggest?

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 increasing at an alarming rate along with uncountable sideffects. The major issues that it is bringing in our lives are diminishing face-to-face interactions among locals and promoting a sedentary lifestyle. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss how putting some restrictions is the best way to curb
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 problem. The internet was discovered to help us, but it has changed the way of communicating with others and made our life easier as well as lazy. Nowadays, no one has time to go out and spend some quality time with their near and dear ones
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 we love to sit in front of screens and chat for the whole day. There are a couple of recent studies that have proven that over
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 of social media is a reason behind destructive families and relations of our locality.
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, continuous scrolling on phones and watching these gadgets have eliminated daily exercise from everyone's life. I believe, to control
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 issue home screen timers or small porting of web data are the most effective ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread use
  • main problems
  • associated with
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • privacy
  • data security
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • online scams
  • fraud
  • loss of productivity
  • impersonal communication
  • social isolation
  • digital divide
  • solutions
  • suggest
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