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People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The past fifty years have seen a dramatic increase in the percentage of families who prefer to delay having
children
. I argue
this
 trend and
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 long term ramifications are negative in nature .
This
 will be proven in the following lines. Looking
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positive
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 impact, some people believe that spend a long time without
children
 will enhance the relationship between the couples.They think
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that every
one
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can realize and adjust
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himself
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 with the other person and
this
 will help them to prepare a positive family atmosphere to bring up the
children
. Turning to the positive sides ,
children
 play a crucial role
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the
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family stabilization. Each
couples
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 has
their
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 own conflicts and the relationship can break down at any time if they
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 not have
children
.The memories of the family gathering and the future of those
children
 make the parents thinking many times before taking the decision of
divorec
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divorce
.
Thus
, the long term results of having
children
 at
older
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 age can be seen as helpless.
Further
 and more importantly, It appears that bringing up
children
 need
a high physical efforts
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.
children
 like to run, swim and play with their parents .If you have
children
 when you are elderly, you will not be able to play with them.
For instance
 one of my best
friend
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 always say to me that his father brought him when he was 60 years so,their relationship is weak.
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,All
this
 considered ,
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there
they
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 negatives .I once
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a gain
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 reaffirm my position the negative aspects
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exceed
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