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Many students decide to further their study abroad. What are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad?

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After graduation almost
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 student has to choose a university in which he or she will study. A lot of students prefer to apply abroad, but another part of undergraduates think that staying in their native country is more beneficial. Personally, I agree with both opinions. There are a lot of advantages
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 studying overseas.
Firstly
, it gives you an opportunity to find the course
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then
 it will help you to find
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 job of your dream.
Secondly
, studying abroad helps to learn more languages and to overcome the language barrier.
Moreover
, in the university in another country you can find new meetings, improving the social life. But there are
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 cons of choosing the college abroad. I think
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 it is very unpleasant for the person to change fully your place to live and social circle, especially for the short period. It is not easy to arrive in an empty place with no home and family.
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, when you learning in another language, new information memorizing worse as the brain has to do double work. It can be a reason
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 the course. One more disadvantage is living expenses – students will have to pay for the room or flat, for the food and sometimes for the university. It will cost a
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 money for the family. Comparing all the pluses and minuses, I would say that there is no right answer
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 to study. Generally, it depends on the identity of the person and his goals which are the most important factors that
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 the decision.
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