Some people hold the view that a good teacher is more important for education success while others think the student’s attitude is more important to succeed in education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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modern time, whether superior instructors are more important or learners attitudes for better academic growth have become a much debatable notion among some people.
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, different people support various points.
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I will explain both views briefly.
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with,those who reckon teachers are more important for the improvement of education give their reason as follows.Since assistants
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the backbone of our society without their contribution a nation will never be able to grow rapidly.
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, pupils learn maximum things in schools
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as respecting elders , morality and many other kinds of stuff.
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, if a person wants to become successful in their life they have to learn life lessons but without the help of ,faculty member it is impossible.
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bring sunshine to pupils life.
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, research shows that when a student suffers from depression or other mental problems a good teacher can easily mitigate
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issue because they have the quality .What is more, they can
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assist weak students with their teaching skills .
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, it can be said that educational prosperity highly depends on teachers. On the other side ,there are
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some masses who claim that pupils attitude is more significant than anything.
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teachers teach everything to them ,yet it remains up to them whether they wanted to learn or not .If they don't have any interest in their subjects they will never be able to understand it .
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, research from the University of Manitoba indicates that about 17% of students failed in their exams because they never sited for studying.So , that's the main reason why a vast number of individuals reckon students behaviour as an important aspect. In conclusion, I would say even though academic growth mostly depends on learners,
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it is highly recommended to have a great teacher.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inspire
  • motivate
  • engaged
  • persist
  • responsibility
  • resources
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational outcomes
  • discipline
  • study habits
  • interdependent
  • individualized support
  • complex concepts
  • overcome challenges
  • receptive student
  • external factors
  • family support
  • peer influence
  • socio-economic status
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