Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however, believe that scholl is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Discipline and punctuality are two qualities
which
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every human being should have. Many
thinks
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that it is a job of
parents
to teach
children
how to be a good citizen of
society
, whereas other think that they should learn it from school. I agree with the
first
thought and in
this
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i
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I
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will present my arguments and provide my opinion.
Firstly
,
children
spend
majority
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the majority
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of their
time
at home with their
parents
. So
influence
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the influence
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of
parents
will be much more on them. So it is
a
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job of guardians to teach them and make them aware with a concept of respect, to every fellow citizen in the
society
.
For example
, they should provide a
role
model in their
life
or they can become a
role
model for them and provide them
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comfortable environment to learn, to respect each other.
Secondly
,
parents
should
also
teach their
children
about their duties towards
soceity
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society
, it helps them to build a character.
For instance
,
parents
should encourage kids to participate voluntarily in social work and community services.
Last
but not least, money management is
also
a quality which should be taught them by their guardian as it helps them in their in
budget
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the budget
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in future.
On the other hand
,
teachers
also
plays
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an important
role
in every
students
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student's
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life
. It is impossible for kids to learn each and every
aspects
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aspect
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of
life
from their folks, in
such
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a case
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case
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,
teachers
should come and play their
role
.
For example
, school is the best place to teach
them
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the
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value
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the value
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of discipline as it is a hard quality for
parents
to teach their kids. Discipline not only helps each individual but in
generalize
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it helps to develop a better nation as each citizen are aware of their duty and
role
in the
society
.
In addition
, punctuality and
time
management are two important aspects of
the
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life
. These two virtues should be taught to students by their
teachers
. In
such
case,
teachers
should give them some task to complete within a limited
time
and who gets succeded in completing them within a
time
limit, they should be rewarded and make them a
role
model for others. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that it is a job of
parents
to teach
children
how to be good members of
society
, but it is
also
important that in some aspects
teachers
and
school
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the school
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also
play their
role
in
this
process and make each
children
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child
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a
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apply
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good citizens.
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