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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others however, believe that scholl is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #members #society #scholl #place
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Discipline and punctuality are two qualities
which
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 every human being should have. Many
thinks
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 that it is a job of
parents
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 to teach
children
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 how to be a good citizen of
society
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, whereas other think that they should learn it from school. I agree with the
first
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 thought and in
this
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essay
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i
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 will present my arguments and provide my opinion.
Firstly
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,
children
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 spend
majority
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the majority
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 of their
time
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 at home with their
parents
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. So
influence
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the influence
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 of
parents
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 will be much more on them. So it is
a
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the
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 job of guardians to teach them and make them aware with a concept of respect, to every fellow citizen in the
society
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.
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, they should provide a
role
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 model in their
life
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 or they can become a
role
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 model for them and provide them
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comfortable environment to learn, to respect each other.
Secondly
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,
parents
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 should
also
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 teach their
children
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 about their duties towards
soceity
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society
, it helps them to build a character.
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,
parents
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 should encourage kids to participate voluntarily in social work and community services.
Last
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 but not least, money management is
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 a quality which should be taught them by their guardian as it helps them in their in
budget
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the budget
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 in future.
On the other hand
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,
teachers
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also
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plays
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 an important
role
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 in every
students
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student's
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life
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. It is impossible for kids to learn each and every
aspects
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 of
life
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 from their folks, in
such
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a case
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case
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,
teachers
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 should come and play their
role
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.
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, school is the best place to teach
them
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the
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value
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the value
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 of discipline as it is a hard quality for
parents
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 to teach their kids. Discipline not only helps each individual but in
generalize
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 it helps to develop a better nation as each citizen are aware of their duty and
role
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 in the
society
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.
In addition
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, punctuality and
time
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 management are two important aspects of
the
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life
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. These two virtues should be taught to students by their
teachers
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. In
such
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 case,
teachers
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 should give them some task to complete within a limited
time
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 and who gets succeded in completing them within a
time
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 limit, they should be rewarded and make them a
role
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 model for others. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that it is a job of
parents
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 to teach
children
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 how to be good members of
society
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, but it is
also
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 important that in some aspects
teachers
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 and
school
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the school
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also
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 play their
role
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 in
this
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 process and make each
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children
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child
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a
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good citizens.
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