IELTS 13 - Exam 2 - Writing Task 2 Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, we are
surronded
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surrounded
by a large amount of
choice
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choices
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,
such
as travelling almost everywhere, buy a lot of
stuffs
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stuff
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. We can do almost everything and for some people, it is too much. Actually, some people think that we are living in a world where nothing is too big. Do a journey along the world seems to be possible, buy a new expensive car is
abordable
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affordable
. All these behaviours come from our society of
overcompsion
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overcompression
but,
also
because we can
moove
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move
faster thanks to technology
such
as plane, or train. We
also
can speak with someone who
live
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in
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on
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the other side of the earth with
Internet
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the Internet
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. It is
like
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as
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if nothing is impossible. Indeed we have a lot of
choice
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choices
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,
thus
children are sometimes lost. We could do so many activities, meet so many peoples, do so many jobs or studies. It is the abundance.
On the other hand
,
that is
true that before, we
where
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more at home. We were going
at
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to
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countryside
contryside
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the contryside
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during
hollydays
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holidays
. It was probably
more calm
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calmer
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. Moving far away from home was not even though. We sent some
letter
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letters
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in order to keep
on
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in
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contact
between
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with
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acquintance
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acquaintance
acquaintances
. We didn't have all these distractions that social networks give to us.
For instance
, during the 19th
centuries
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, women couldn't work. They must stay at home in order to take care of her children.
Also
, they couldn't vote and at school, they were taught to be a good and quiet wife.
Moreover
, men
where
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were
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often following their father's job. At
this
time, we had less
choice
than today.
In
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some
point
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it might be easier to do not
have
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to have
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the
choice
. But, most of
time
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it may look like jail to not be able to do what you want during your life. In conclusion, I believe that we have a couple of
choice
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choices
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today, which is a
benefits
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benefit
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sometimes but not always.
However
, I prefer to have much more
choice
than not enough.
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