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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

In the modern
world
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, technology has created easy
access
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 for
people
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 to download copyrighted songs and
books
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 from different sources without any cost. In my opinion,
although
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 it has some disadvantages,
advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages. Getting more accessibility on these
things
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 can help
people
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 to extend their
knowledge
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, though it has
piracy
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a piracy
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 problem. On one hand, there are many benefits to obtain free
access
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 to different types of
music
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 and
books
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. In today's
world
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, a majority of the
people
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 are still living under
poverty
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the poverty
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 line. It is really difficult for them to buy these
things
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in
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online.
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, in Africa, most of the
people
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 are living under
poverty
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the poverty
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 line and it would not be possible for them to purchase
such
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things
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 which
are really need
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are really needed
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 for expanding their
knowledge
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. So, easy
accessbility
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accessibility
 is created by modern technology badly helpful for the
people
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 to increase their
knowledge
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 level. Again, if
a
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people
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 can able to get easy
access
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on
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 these items, they definitely will give something to the
world
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 by learning from those
things
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.
Consequently
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, every
people
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 will get
oppoptunity
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opportunity
 to accomplish something worth in the
world
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 by learning from different types of
books
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 and
music
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.
On the other hand
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, some problems have been arisen
becasue
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because
 of
free
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access
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of
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to
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 melodies and
books
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in
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apply
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the
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apply
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online. There are some songs and
books
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 which are restricted to share everywhere.
Furthermore
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, sometimes
people
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 sing a song or create
a
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music
a piece of music
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music
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, and write a book for earning purposes,
additionally
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, it has piracy
restriction
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restrictions
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 as well. Sometimes it may be discouraged the actor or writer
for
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from
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 making innovative somethings in the following days.
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, in Bangladesh,
a
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apply
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music
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 which is named " Aynabaji" was so much popular among the mass
people
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, but it has lost its popularity after spreading to some of the internet sites and youtube as well.
Thus
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, the
music
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 creator and writer are lost their interest gradually. To conclude, though making
accessible
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it accessible
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 to download
music
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 and
books
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 have some drawbacks, it
really
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 beneficial for everyone who wants to enhance their
knowledge
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 in those sectors. It is recommended to create a platform for the mass
people
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 so that everyone can get
access
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 using only some rules and regulations.

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