Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every
country
have
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it's
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major allocation in three sectors i.e. National Security, Education and
Health
Services
. These three factors determine the pace and growth of the
country
and how it is
contributng
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contributing
towards
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it's
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citizen's
health
and well being.
However
, among these three factors,
Healthcare
Services
plays the most important role. The subject of
Health
is vital and access to quality
healthcare
is
right
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of every individual. No one in the world
,
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wants to fall sick but in case someone
incure
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ensure
incur
any critical illness it becomes very difficult to pay the premium prices at private hospitals. For countries like India, which is
densly
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densely
populated, innovation in public
healthcare
is a dire need and building
right
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infrastructure to make
health
services
accessible for all, is something which
government
should really focus on. In my opinion,
health
services
should be easily available for every individual. Our
Government
should issue
health
cards or regulate the quality of
services
being offered in a hospital setup on regular basis. It is not important to make it completely free but everyone should be benefited and
specially
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people below
poverty
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line.
Also
,
government
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can regulate the prices for essential
life saving
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drugs and make sure it is easily available to all the layers of
economy
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. Per capita income and household income can become deciding factors for allocating free
services
.
For example
: a person who has no
health
insurance, have no job and have critical illness should become
'1st
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priority
healthcard
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health card
healthcare
holder' whereas, a person who has stable income,
health
insurance and no illness should be entitled
with
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'2nd priority
healthcard
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health card
healthcare
holder' To summarise, every
country
should have free
healthcare
as every individual works directly or indirectly to contribute towards
it's
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country
's economic and social development.
Therefore
, in return, it becomes
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of every
government
to work towards providing free and quality
healthcare
to the citizens.
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