Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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In the midst of
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technology-driven global world, the way of
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, take care of their
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also
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changed .Most of the
parents
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gifted their
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kids
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lots
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of
toys
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for playing
.
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with.
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In
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essay , I will be telling the drawbacks and positives of the foremost topic.
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, over the past few
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human thoughts and mentality changed towards
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life and relationships.
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,
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guardians love their
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,
however
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,they don'
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know how to express it in
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the
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right way. On the one hand , they think that, if they presented
lots
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of
toys
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to play
for
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their
kids
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, they will be happy, but it is not true actually. Ostensibly , they will be happy for
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first
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the first
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few days
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they will get bore with that
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particular
toy and they just throw it out,
this
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is the
first
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disadvantage of the same.
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,
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the younger
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generation won'
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understand the value of money,
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,whenever they ask for something
parents
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are ready to give it,
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they are not getting a chance to realise how hard it is to make money.
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,
kids
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are not able to keep their things safely , as they have
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apply
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more than they need, they don'
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care about it.
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but not least , most of the
toys
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are indoor based,
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they are not interacting with others who are
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of
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their
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same age, so their social interaction and sharing behaviour will be less.
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,
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kids
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are happy to have
lots
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of
toys
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, they will be satisfied by
this
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. By getting more gifts from their
parents
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or relatives they think that they loved them
alot
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a lot
. The main advantage of
this
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is
kids
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remain
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in-home
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in
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home
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, so you can keep an eye on them
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since we are living in a dangerous era,as our
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are getting kidnapped and
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of child abuse increases day by day.
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, if
kids
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going out,
parents
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won'
t
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be knowing with
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whom
they make friendship .Admittedly, from childhood children are getting addicted to drugs and all so at
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senario
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scenario
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better to have our
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in
home
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. To make our children sit in
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, it is
necessory
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necessary
to gift them
lots
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of different types of
toys
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. To put it in a nutshell , I pen down saying that, encouraging
kids
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by presenting various types of
toys
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make them happy at the same time
parents
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try to develop sharing habit, social interaction and their academic skills.
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