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Celebrities make a very good living out of media attention and have chosen to live in the public spotlight. They have no right to complain when they feel the media are intruding on their privacy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The vast majority of
people
 believe that celebrities become rich due to the public spotlight and they should not complain about the media interfering with their privacy.
This
 essay agrees with
such
 a viewpoint partially and
firstly
 it will discuss the consequences of being popular.
Secondly
, the fact that fame should not disturb a private
life
 even in the case of celebrities. It is evident that prominent performers who have chosen the career of actor or singer have potentially path which leads to fame,
besides
 for many of them,
this
 part is quite important for ambitions and public
life
. Since they have been invited to the public they should not be surprised if there will be much attention.
For instance
, there have always been different newspapers
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
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 prefer to print out various gossip or scandals about their private
life
. Public attention is not something
people
 can turn off, so before choosing they should be aware of disadvantages.
On the other hand
, there should always be a distinction between social and private
life
. Undoubtedly, famous persons are attracting attention and have profit due to their popularity,
however
, work should stay away after the end of the working day. All of us dream during the day back home and stay alone, without any
people
 around or spend time with families. Having said that, there is an unfair opinion that famous
people
 should not complain about breaking personal boundaries. To conclude, the question about the private
life
 of celebrities has always been controversial, there are many different opinions
about
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itabout
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. As the media is more and more powerful nowadays, there will always be a question about privacy,
however
, it should be noted that all members of society ought to have the same rights.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public spotlight
  • Media intrusion
  • Social contract
  • Paparazzi
  • Ethical limits
  • Mental health
  • Privacy rights
  • Public persona
  • Harassment
  • Media scrutiny
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