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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

#information #features #comparisons
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The bar chart gives information on why employees decide to
work
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 at
home
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, while the table reveals the number of
hours
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men
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 and
women
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 spend working from the house in the year 2019. Overall, it can be seen that the major reason why both genders choose to
work
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 from the house is to save money and
men
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 spend more time working from
home
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 than
women
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.
To begin
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, saving money is the most important reason both gender
work
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 from
home
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 with rates of 45% for
men
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 and 42% for
women
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.
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, the least reason male employees
work
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 from
home
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 is for easier childcare of 4% while that of the female employees is more productivity with a percentage of 11.
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, as regards the amount of time spent per
week
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,
men
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 worked the most with 81% for a duration of over 30hours per
week
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.
Women
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 worked the most under 10hours per
week
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 with about 74% rate which is 71% more than the time male workers spend under 10hours. Between the
hours
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 of 10 to 30 per
week
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, males and females rated 16% and 22% respectively.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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