The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

We are living in a world where the Internet starts to take a lot of places. Indeed, even physical shopping has been replaced by online shopping. It is the birth of a lot of controversies. In
this
essay, we will discuss the benefits and drawbacks
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this
new form of shopping.
Firstly
, for many people, shopping online is easier because you can buy whatever you want, whenever you want. Accessing
to
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evrything
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everything
has never been so easy, whereas in stores some stuff
were
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sometimes out of stock.
Then
, everyone can stay at home and just wait with nothing to do. As it is faster as well it
look
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like magic. For
this
reason, many people
enjoys
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this
method especially,
thus
living to the
contryside
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countryside
.
Then
, living far away from the city takes a massive time, from 30 minutes to one hour, just to see the edge of the town. But, it is a nightmare
that is
hidden behind all
this
wonderful process. Indeed,
bankruptcy
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of markets is one of the sad consequences . The centre of the town is less attractive and a couple of stores are suffering a decline
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funds because of
this
. We have some issues with an increase
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poverty in
this
departement
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department
.
Then
it is the spark for many people to lose their job. To conclude, I believe that it is killing human lives to only count on the Internet. Networks are funny but not when they take
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some job to a good citizen.
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