IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

You recently read an article in the newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write a letter to editor to inform him about it. What is the article about? What is the error? What you expect an editor to do?

#article #newspaper #someone #information #editor #error
Dear
Sir
, I am writing
this
 letter to you regarding the recent
article
 you published about
Sir
 David Markham
last
 week, April 2nd, in The Times newspaper. The
article
 gives a brief biography of
Sir
 David’s life and
then
 continues to focus
his
Change preposition
on his
show examples
work
 and the impact it has had. The biography starts with his birth in Edinburgh and his later move in 1962 to Durham University. From there, it focuses on his
work
 with the UN. I would like to point out an error in your
article
. Documentation shows that
Sir
 David did not go directly from Edinburgh to the University of Durham, in 1961. In
fact
Add a comma
,fact
show examples
 he took a gap year in Europe working with a volunteer program and
then
 went to University in 1962. I know
this
 as I worked with him in Europe and became friends with him. His year abroad, which is absent from your
article
, created the foundation of his philosophy of life which guided him through his
work
 in later years. I hope you will publish
this
 correction in the newspaper.
Sir
 David’s
work
 is still of immense importance and people should know the importance of that gap year in his life. Looking forward to a positive reply. Yours faithfully, Hardik Patel
Submitted by borasedinesh00 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: