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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
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Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
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community
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work
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, whether teenagers spend their leisure time for
community
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works
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, it has benefits for themselves and society or not has caused an argument. From my perspective, I totally agree that it has numerous advantages for both.
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, it is clear that doing
community
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work
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 in spare time has lots of
benefit
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 for themselves in several sides,
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, they can improve their social and teamwork skills because they must
work
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 with many
people
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a different
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family
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,
therefore
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, it has different ways to interact with distinct
people
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.
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, they can manage conflict and negotiate with other
people
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 because almost all of
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works
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the works
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 will have some problems and working with others can cause a little argument due to different
opinion
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opinions
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.
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, doing
community
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works
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 have a lot of advantages for society in many ways because
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community
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the community
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 will have
people
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 who
full
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 of energy,
then
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 they can do many things for
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community
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the community
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.
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, they can solve
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the trash
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 problem by picking up trash on the street and sidewalks and create
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a campaign
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campaign
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 to leave garbage in the right places, it seems just a little thing but if there are many
people
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 doing
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 it can cause a huge effect
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this
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 problem. In summary, teenagers doing
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work
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 in their leisure time has lots of
benefit
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 for themselves and society. Meanwhile,
government
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the government
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 should support them
for
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to
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do
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this
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 thing as much as possible by
promote
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community
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works
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. By doing so,
people
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 will be raised awareness of
community
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work
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 importance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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