Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of

people

are concerned about

community

work

However

, whether teenagers spend their leisure time for

community

works

, it has benefits for themselves and society or not has caused an argument. From my perspective, I totally agree that it has numerous advantages for both.

Firstly

, it is clear that doing

community

work

in spare time has lots of

benefit

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for themselves in several sides,

for example

, they can improve their social and teamwork skills because they must

work

with many

people

from

different

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a different

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family

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families

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therefore

, it has different ways to interact with distinct

people

Moreover

, they can manage conflict and negotiate with other

people

because almost all of

works

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the works

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will have some problems and working with others can cause a little argument due to different

opinion

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Second

, doing

community

works

have a lot of advantages for society in many ways because

community

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the community

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will have

people

who

full

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of energy,

then

they can do many things for

community

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the community

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For instance

, they can solve

trash

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the trash

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problem by picking up trash on the street and sidewalks and create

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a campaign

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campaign

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to leave garbage in the right places, it seems just a little thing but if there are many

people

doing

this

it can cause a huge effect

for

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this

problem. In summary, teenagers doing

community

work

in their leisure time has lots of

benefit

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benefits

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for themselves and society. Meanwhile,

government

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the government

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should support them

for

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doing

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this

thing as much as possible by

promote

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promoting

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community

works

. By doing so,

people

will be raised awareness of

community

work

importance.

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