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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
 are concerned about
life
.
However
, whether
scientists
 find procedures to prolong
life
 a good thing or not has caused an argument. In
this
 essay, both points of view will be tackled and my opinion will
also
 be given.
Firstly
, it is obvious that humans just have one
life
 and it will pass in a blink of an eye but some
people
 want to live longer.
This
 is because they think death is scary and they worry about the
people
 around them.
Therefore
, it is necessary for
scientists
 to find methods to extend
life
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe having a long
life
 is not a good thing because they think
life
 is full of problems. They will have many negative feelings that make them feel tired to live
such
 as they will be concerned about finances in their
life
, their health and many more.
Moreover
, when
people
 are getting older, most of them will have many diseases that make them feel hopeless and tortured that hard to stay alive. With these things mentioned, it is not beneficial for someone to stay alive for many years. In my opinion,
scientists
 should make
people
 have a long
life
 or not. It depends on the individual’s demands since
people
 have different lives so they have different needs. Personally, I am satisfied with my
life
 but I do not want to extend it because I think the longer my
life
 is, the more problems I have. In summary,
this
 topic has two sides, it depends on the individual. Meanwhile,
scientists
 should do their best to find processes to extend
life
, and respond to the needs of
people
 who want to have a long
life
. By doing so, every individual would have a chance to live their
life
 the way they want it.
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