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A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

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Employment and advanced
irrigation
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 techniques have developed many nations and have revolutionised the economic status, globally. There are some individuals who agreed to establish company testing institutes
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 farming experimentation labs are selected by others in a nation.
This
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 essay will emphasise why building farming innovative labs is more significant and
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 will provide evidence of the current
irrigation
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 approach. The most common reasons seem to be based on providing food security and improving education to the native land by constructing advanced laboratories for farming. In past years, there were several issues which were faced by local peasants
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 as climate change, pest control, and the scarcity of resources, which declined to produce a yield of various plants. These challenges cannot tackled unless advanced
irrigation
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 techniques are introduced which will not only modify the traditional farming methods but
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 provide several opportunities for growers to grow their
crops
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 without having problems regarding extreme weather, pest resistance or shortage of farming equipment. In Canada,
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, the community can purchase all kinds of fruits, vegetables and flour because the farming approach is well-advanced and these food products are grown under special human-made weather conditions since it is difficult to plant seasonal food products during winter. Bringing modern science laboratories for farming
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 plays a key role in developing the literacy rate of a nation by providing education and experiments on certain
crops
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 which are difficult to cultivate. If these laboratories focus on introducing new experiments to increase the productivity or high-yield farming methods of
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, agriculturist will learn how to manage their
crops
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, leading to a decrease in the number of
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 difficulties. Unless small-scale agriculturists have access to modern technological tools
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 as farming drills and advanced tractors, the struggle of overcoming different issues of farming will never be accomplished so establishing a modern laboratory for farming is more essential. The more farmers have access to learn about advanced
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 methods, the less adversities they will face, promoting a sense of belonging which is essential for personal and national literacy development. In conclusion,
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 building new labs for industries is important , advanced
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 institutes are more crucial because these institutes will improve farmers' knowledge to grow more
crops
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 despite thinking about the consequences.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure all ideas in the essay are connected smoothly, enhancing the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs for maximum clarity.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples and detailed examples to support main ideas. This will help in strengthening your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and well-constructed, effectively framing the argument.
Task Achievement
Main points are well developed, showing a deep understanding of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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