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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool.Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, more
people
 spend their time playing with their phones, whether on social media or playing with
the
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various application including
video
games
. There is a wide range of
video
games
 available which attract
people
 to try them, and I am one of these
people
. Despite the
joy
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 these
games
 add to the users, some
people
 think they have
bad
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a bad
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 effect on
people
 that use them. For those who are for
the
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video
games
, the argument is that they are good for the brain
,
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 since some
games
 involve
alot
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a lot
 of thinking and have quizzes can energize the mind.
Moreover
, some
games
 include valuable information that equips users with more knowledge about the topics they cover. The counter-opinion believes that
video
games
 are time consumers, and one can spend hours playing without noticing.
Moreover
, some
video
games
 might have violent scenes
such
 as murders, and these would have negative impacts on the kids and adolescents if not watched carefully by the parents. In conclusion,
video
games
 might have positive or negative impacts, depending on the one that uses them. I believe if managed in the right way and with consciousness, they might be of good use.
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