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Natural resources, such as oil, forests and fresh water, are being consumed at an alarming rate. What problems does this cause? How can we solve these problems?

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Over few decades, a large amount of different natural
resources
 have been consumed and it has become a serious problem that
governments
 need to address instantly to protect them from running off. In
this
 essay, I will illustrate the underlying reasons and offer some advice on how to tackle
this
 issue. One primary reason is that
people
's supply of
energy
 for different purposes can not meet the demands. Because of the increasing population all around the world,
people
 need more fuel to produce
energy
 which maintains works for domestic industries, aviation industries, and agriculture. One possible approach would be producing legislation to confine the number of birth. Decreasing population is a direct way to solve
this
 issue, but it is difficult to implement since the law will invade
people
's rights. Another major contributing factor is the fact that renewable
resources
 are still not common in use.
People
 have less knowledge about renewable
energy
, and the technique for
this
 is not quite mature.
Furthermore
,
although
people
 can get renewable
resources
such
 as sunlight, water or wind everywhere, producing renewable
energy
 needs high costs, especially solar
energy
 production. The way to boost manufacturers' willingness to use more renewable
energy
,
governments
 should spread the importance of
this
 issue and let residents gain awareness of the concerns.
Moreover
,
governments
 should provide financial support to improve the development of renewable
energy
, accelerating the mature technique appearance and delining the costs. By way of conclusion, lots of natural
resources
 are almost running out because of the increasing demands for
energy
 use and the lack of information about how to get more renewable
energy
.
However
, there are some methods that can tackle
this
 problem: one is producing the law to restrict rising birth, another is by
governments
 support and funds.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • non-renewable resources
  • economic instability
  • water shortages
  • agricultural production
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable management
  • conservation
  • alternative energy
  • afforestation
  • reforestation
  • water conservation
  • responsible consumption
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