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There have been a major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The given topic is highly controversial .
However
 , If a glance is taken at the pros and cons of
this
 aspect , It is irrefutable to say that while there are a lot of advantages of
technology
 , as the disadvantages . So , I perceive that I agree with the statement and I hereby give the following arguments to support myself . Commencing with a
first
 and foremost point in the list of my knowledge is that , when
technology
 came in human
life
then
 , people are changed their
life
 and they are working
time
 to
time
 and
also
 they are earning money more as compared the past , that
time
 people are faced a lot of problems
such
 as transportation , communication issues and best Hospital so on.
This
 type of they is faced complicated .
Therefore
 , Nowadays , they are happy more in their
life
 .
In addition
 to
this
 , It main profits of the businessman because they can easily communicate one businessman to another businessman and it saves the
time
 .
For instance
 , they can travail easily from one country to another country with few hours as well as import and export . So , that's why
technology
 is very beneficial for human
life
 .
Furthermore
 , there are some disadvantages associated with it as well . when
technology
 comes into human
life
 and they become lazier and
also
 they face health-related problems . Apart from
this
 , children are using more mobile and they are playing indoor games and they can not know what happens outside and they can not spend
time
 with their family . because they are busy in their
life
 . After analyzing the matter , it would be right to say that despite a few disadvantages , many advantages offer rank higher . Though , people should limit
use
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technology
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 . So , they can not face any problems in future .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cutting-edge
  • innovations
  • breakthroughs
  • automation
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • mobile technologies
  • diagnostic tools
  • renewable energy
  • efficiency
  • economic growth
  • knowledge sharing
  • global scale
  • cleaner alternatives
  • job displacement
  • update skills
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