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Some people think that it is difficult for poor people or people from rural areas to go to university. So that the universities should make it especially easy for them. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Further
education
 has become increasingly common nowadays for young generations.
However
, due to the economic situation in some families, it is suggested that universities should lower admission standards for these impoverished applicants. I completely disagree with
this
 idea and I will explain my opinion with examples in
this
 essay.
First
 and foremost, it defies the target of tertiary
education
 by giving more spots to penniless teenagers ,not outstanding performance
students
.
This
 is because university
education
 mainly aims at providing specialized and general knowledge to young generations in certain areas, which has high requirements on intelligence. If a student is given privileges due to needy family status
instead
 of recruiting fairly according to the academic performance and the intelligence quotient, it is easy to foresee that most teenagers will lose their motivation and interest in studying well and getting better scores.
As a result
, universities will eventually admit less high-performance
students
 while more starveling
students
, which definitely betray the keystone of cultivating ridgepole.
Furthermore
, easier admission procedures for applicants in poverty may create social inequality and conflicts. To be more specific,
further
education
 institutions should choose their student by the same standard which is the merit of
students
.
Otherwise
, some outstanding
students
 may be neglected and they would probably feel disappointed about society.
For example
, several American universities used to select their candidates based on their social classes, as a consequence, a massive of
students
 missed their opportunists to have their college life.
This
 inequality caused a severe shooting on the campus by one of the rejected applicants. In conclusion, even though there are requirements of using lower recruiting standards on poor
students
, I believe
this
 solution is impractical since it may lead to social unfairness and the ruin of real tertiary
education
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • barriers
  • limited access
  • financial constraints
  • equality and diversity
  • comprehensive approaches
  • scholarships
  • mentorship programs
  • academic support
  • root causes
  • maintaining academic standards
  • fairness
  • merit-based
  • inclusive higher education system
  • social and economic benefits
  • dynamism
  • innovation
  • tailored support
  • admission criteria
  • inclusive approach
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