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A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self-study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies. To what extent what do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 era, due to vast
advancement
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 in technology and
internet
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,
students
 have become capable of studying
English
 on their own privately
instead
 of attending a formal class.Some people argue that
students
 might encounter some obstacles in their studies as they lack the guidance of an instructor.I disagree with
this
 statement to some extent.In
this
 essay,I will put forward valid arguments surrounding the issue and my own opinion will be addressed
further
. From my perspective,I believe that the most essential thing in the learning process of a particular
language
 is
the
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exposure
with
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 that
language
.As long as we are interacting with
English
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language
 on a daily basis by some means
such
 as watching movies,listening
music
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 or radios and even speaking
English
 online with a mate from Western countries,we can somehow improve ourselves to
certain
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 degree.
Moreover
,the contents available on the
internet
such
 as Youtube,chrome and telegram are quite reliable.It is pertinent to mention that learners can
study
English
 anytime,anywhere as long as the
internet
 connection is
acessible
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accessible
.
Therefore
,unlike formal learning courses in which we cannot opt for the most suitable time to
study
, the
convience
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convenience
 and efficiency of
internet
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 might promote the mastery of
student
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students
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on
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English
.
Furthermore
,despite having limited time to
study
 in
language
 classes,
students
 can learn and practise as much as they want on the
internet
,albeit not very systematically.It is undeniable that the more a student practises, the more proficient he will become. On the
otherhand
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other hand
,in some cases, the role of a formal course cannot be underestimated.A well-experienced pedagogue can correct our mistakes, enhance our
knowlege
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knowledge
 and comprehension,provide some special tips and indicate the most efficient way to
study
.
In addition
,a student might not be monotonous easily owing to the competitive peers and motivating teacher,whereas he might get tedious
studing
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studying
standing
 alone without an
accompany
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. To recapitulate,I am convinced that individuals can
study
 independently with the aid of
internet
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 notwithstanding some drawbacks.Since online learning will only cost
internet
bill
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,
students
,regardless of any financial background, are
accessible
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 to almost every helpful resource.So,being able to keep in touch with
English
 anytime and having access to a manifold of sources on the
internet
,
students
 can learn and be fluent and proficient in
English
 even without the guidance of a teacher.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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