Unhealthy eating has a negative effect on both individuals and the society in which they live. Some people think that the government should tax unhealthy foods while others believe that a ‘fat tax’ is unfair and unnecessary. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
It is considered
as
a scientific fact that unhealthy Change preposition
apply
food
Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
fast-
Correct your spelling
fast food
food
and convenience Use synonyms
food
has become a ubiquitous part of Use synonyms
the
contemporary Correct article usage
apply
society
. Eating healthy Use synonyms
food
does not only contribute to the rise of obesityUse synonyms
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
increases the risk of associated diseases Linking Words
such
as diabetes, heart condition and cancer, which costs millions of dollars on medical treatment every year. Linking Words
Hence
, some Linking Words
people
advocate that the government should impose a "fat tax" on unhealthy Use synonyms
food
in order to discourage overconsumption, while others disagree and feel that Use synonyms
this
may Linking Words
interpreted
as discriminatory to some Change the verb form
be interpreted
people
. Use synonyms
Although
unhealthy Linking Words
food
may not be Use synonyms
independent
factor of becoming obese, I believe that rising prices on unhealthy sustenance is Add an article
an independent
sensible
idea in terms of reducing the rate of obesity and obesity-related diseases as well as lowering the costs in medical treatment.
There are several negative Add an article
a sensible
impact
of unhealthy Change to a plural noun
impacts
food
on both individuals and Use synonyms
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
. Over the Use synonyms
last
century, the fast-Linking Words
food
industry has moved in the Use synonyms
tendem
with the full-time employment with longer working hours. Correct your spelling
tandem
tender
People
are busier than ever before and do not have time to cook or Use synonyms
the
learn the art of cookery. Other factors Correct article usage
apply
such
as the sedentary lifestyle and the emergence of new technological ways of communication Linking Words
additionally
have exacerbated the problem. As the obesity rate continues to rise, it puts a lot of strain on Linking Words
the
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apply
society
. Obese Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
also
are less likely to be employed, and Linking Words
thus
constitute a greater burden on Linking Words
society
.
Admittedly, unhealthy Use synonyms
food
does not play an independent role in Use synonyms
people
getting obese or attracting associated diseases. Other causes Use synonyms
such
as genetics, exercise as well as portion size Linking Words
also
play a huge role. Linking Words
In addition
, low-income families are more likely to consume cheap fatty Linking Words
food
, and it leads to more strain on their budget. What is more, it may Use synonyms
regarded
as another Change the verb form
regard
goverment
revenue-gathering scheme as there are already taxes on alcohol and cigarettes but these Correct your spelling
government
has
not stopped Change the verb form
have
people
to drink and smoke, respectively.
In conclusion, there are some compelling arguments in favour of and against unhealthy Use synonyms
food
, Use synonyms
however
, any shortcoming of the fat tax is eclipsed by the fact the unhealthy Linking Words
food
has a detrimental effect on individuals and Use synonyms
society
, and Use synonyms
by
taxing it higher may help to avert Change preposition
apply
people
away from overconsumption.Use synonyms
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