It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Some people argue that the development of
technology
leads to the erosion of traditions. It might be true in some societies, Use synonyms
however
, other societies seem to be not affected by Linking Words
technology
or the modern Use synonyms
world
.
On the one hand, Use synonyms
technology
which industrialises Western countries definitely causes the disappearance of traditional lifestyles. Use synonyms
For example
, in the pre-industrialised United Kingdom, families in generations grew in Linking Words
communities
of the same villages. These Use synonyms
communities
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due to
common religion and customs, had strong self-commitments in identity. Linking Words
However
, the development of transportation, communication, and manufacturing led to the dispread of those families and countryside Linking Words
communities
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, residents need to immigrate to cities to seek employment opportunities. Nowadays, most countryside inhabitants are commuters, and many of them do not even know their neighbours.
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On the other hand
, in some parts of the Linking Words
world
, traditional Use synonyms
cultures
are still prosperous. Use synonyms
For example
, Amazon tribes are absolutely not affected by Linking Words
technology
from the developed Use synonyms
world
. These tribes continued to hunt animals and pick vegetables from the forests, and traditional skills were passed from the older generation to the younger generation. Other traditional societies, Use synonyms
such
as some agricultural Linking Words
communities
in Africa, are hugging communication technologies. Mobile phones provide information from weather forecasts to market prices to peasants, which helps them develop strongly, Use synonyms
thus
supporting their traditional Linking Words
cultures
.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
although
it is true that many traditional values and practices are vanishing because Linking Words
technology
is developing quickly in the modern Use synonyms
world
, there are still many traditional Use synonyms
communities
and Use synonyms
cultures
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survived
Correct pronoun usage
that survived
from
modern Change preposition
apply
technology
’s invasion and their Use synonyms
cultures
are even developing flourishingly.Use synonyms
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task response
Your essay provides a well-balanced response to the prompt, addressing both sides of the argument. However, try to elaborate more on how traditional cultures can adapt alongside technology, as this will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
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supporting points
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introduction
The introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance, setting up the reader for what to expect in the essay.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points discussed in the essay, reinforcing your argument.
task response
You have provided relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.
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