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in many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
It is The Turn of another decade and the number of
people
 living in cities is still alarmingly growing. one possible answer which is made with mixed opinions is to turn to rural
areas
 to house extra families. It has its downsides for sure but I believe there are benefits that make it a viable option. Rural
areas
 as of now have some advantages over city sites. Many
people
 state the placidity of the countryside is why they choose to live in
such
 places. by Relocating families out of town and into villages, dissatisfaction is going to rise among villagers and they might not welcome new folks into their neighbourhood because you feel like the Freedom is being taken away from them.
Furthermore
, most agricultural products come from Green lands existing in suburban
areas
; mostly because the weather is less polluted there, plus it is cheaper, so huge acres of land is used to grow crops and fruits. the land will surely begin to increase in value if more
people
 start to look for places to live. In
such
 a situation, farmers would rather build houses on their land rather than grow vegetables, resulting in a huge blow to agricultural activities.
on the other hand
, cities are becoming too crowded day by day to point of posing a serious threat to their inhabitants. the safety of the
people
 alone, in my opinion, is enough reason to move forward with the plans to ask city dwellers to migrate to less populated sites.
in addition
, if the population of suburban
areas
 grow, the government might find it more reasonable to establish more amenities in
such
areas
.
as a result
, all
people
 living in near districts are going to benefit from
this
. in conclusion, while the decision to relocate city dwellers to the countryside is not flawless, it sure is the wiser option in my book.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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