University should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Equality
is one of the main issues in different areas in cities and civilizations. Higher education as one of the main aspects of a civilized society is expected to be fair. some say that
equality
in
this
aspect means that universities should have an equal
number
of acceptance from their male and female participants, some argue that
this
is not a matter of
number
and other factors should be considered for
this
issue
to be fair. I think as
this
is a very complex
issue
and quantity is not the sole funder of it the former statement seems more reasonable.
firstly
, in sociology
equality
does not necessarily mean the same
number
of contributors. in some issues like ,education
this
is a much more complicated matter that can not be simply answered with equal numbers,
infact
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in fact
this
makes it more problematic as other influential factors of the
issue
are not considered or answered. in the spirit of ,
equality
every gender should be provided with the same opportunities and facilities which can result in the same
number
of participants but
this
is not necessarily the outcome. Another
issue
is that not every major is equally favourable by men and women and forcing people to study a major just so it would be equally including both genders is actually against the fairness that quality is implying . for ,example art is considered to be loved by girls more than boys
although
every applicant should have the same opportunity and chance to get
in
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this
major. limiting it to be for boys and girls equally is actually taking the chance of getting in art majors from
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female
applicant
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as it is more demanding among them. in conclusion,
although
having the same
number
of contestants seems like a suitable answer to
equality
. it is the most primitive answer to the
issue
and
by
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this
approach not only won't
it
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answers the
issue
but
also
it seems like a way to evade the responsibility and it can not result
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justice.
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