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Many young people change their jobs and careers. What are the reasons for this, Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent days, the younger generations are changing
work
 and the type of
jobs
 they do. There are a number of causes that lead to
this
 behaviour like
work
 pressure, unconducive
work
 environment among others. I believe that doing
this
 will have detrimental effects on someone’s career. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why the drawbacks outweigh the benefits of
work
 and career
change
.
To begin
 with, young employees in any
work
 environment are always on the lookout for well-paying
jobs
. In most countries, there are companies or professions that offer good salaries to their employees, and
this
 is the key driving factor that makes young workers
change
 their
work
 and careers. Safaricom,
for example
, is a tech firm in Kenya that offers high packages to its workers, and
also
 offers a lot of benefits,
such
 as health insurance, house, and transport allowances. Another factor making young stars shift
jobs
 is an unconducive
work
 environment. There are some workstations that put pressure on their employees to deliver on tasks. Asking workers,
for instance
, to report to
work
 on Saturdays in order to achieve a given milestone could make them stressed and reduce their level of productivity. Some managers could
also
 be not so good team leaders, and
as a result
, all these contribute towards the creation of a toxic workplace that could drive people out in numbers. In my opinion, changing
jobs
 or professions may taint your resume and may not be a good impression to employers. If a professional is used to these behaviours, employers may be sceptical to put you in a managerial position as you may cut a figure as someone not loyal to a particular organisation. In conclusion, it is important to
change
work
 as and when necessary. Moving from one company to another will negatively affect progress in your career, and hirers may shun you if you
change
work
 all the time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career switch
  • job dissatisfaction
  • financial incentives
  • personal fulfillment
  • professional advancement
  • exploratory journey
  • toxic workplace
  • acquisition of new competencies
  • workplace flexibility
  • adapting to evolving industries
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