Some people believe that song lyrics which glorify violence and criminal lifestyle should be banned. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such a ban.

These days, there is an ongoing debate about lyrics in
song
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the song
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that has terrific story should not be purchased.
Nevertheless
, some part of
people
love
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listening
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this
kind of
music
.
This
essay will examine the advantages and some
disadvanges
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disadvantages
.
To begin
with, there are some pros, banning song which has harassment and rude words may supply
people
who
under
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twenty years old or lack of knowledge, understanding, experiences behave something bad for society.
This
means that
this
method will help decrease violence in
city
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. A clear example for
this
is some country which has
organisation
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an organisation
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for taking care
this
issue, must examine videos, lyrics before
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it on social media or purchase in
department
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store. Another thing is
people
realize in producing
music
. An illustration for
this
is in Thailand
,
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when regulation limits lyrics or
music
video
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videos
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that have porn, sexual harassment, the
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of
people
who pay attention
with
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these will dwindle and tend to criminal in society will decrease.
However
, there are some
group
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groups
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of
people
who love and enjoy
listening
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tolistening
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these kind
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of
music
criticize and disagree with the government, organisation.
Moreover
,
this
event may the main reason that cause protestation and cause
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an accident
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accident
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accidents
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.
Additionally
,
music
company
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companies
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create
this
type of
songs
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lack
the
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income and staff cannot get
wage
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ontime that bring to resignation and unemployment. At the end of the day, it can be seen that unemployment is
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big issue. If a lot of
people
ban kind of these songs, they will not have money for living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glorify
  • ban
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • promotes
  • positive
  • messages
  • values
  • protects
  • impressionable
  • individuals
  • young people
  • reduces
  • influence
  • harmful
  • content
  • society
  • encourages
  • artists
  • uplifting
  • meaningful
  • music
  • decreases
  • normalizing
  • violent
  • criminal
  • behavior
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