More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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deaths are

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a consequence

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of bad eating habits. The

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symptom of

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bad alimentation is the overweight. From

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, start to appear a huge number of diseases that affects the development of the persons, and they are more dangerous when the bad habits start in the

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years of life. Analyzing the routines of some parents and the

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of fast foods to the school cafeteria, you can see two ways that have children to access

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these foods. The main cause of the

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of

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overweight is the

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of fast

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.

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type of

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has too much sugar and fats, ingredients that have two impacts

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the body.

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hand, they increase the weight of the persons because they are not eliminated from the bodies,

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of the

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.

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, these two ingredients create

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to aliments that

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. So, kids will want to eat

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and again, increasing the ingest of these bad foods. But the real question we can make is, why children

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eat

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food

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. And the answer could be the

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, some parents do not have too much time, so they

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buy fast

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and avoid cooking healthy

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. In the short term, that could be a good way to feed their kids, but in the long

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these

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food

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causes a lot of illness in their bodies. Another answer is that

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the biggest companies spend a lot of money

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put their

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in the schools, so

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to our kids from their

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years. One of the effects is that the overweight leads to other health diseases, as

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diseases, high tension, liver and lung illness. In the case of

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these illness carries

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difficult

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to study affecting their academic level. In adults, the performance in the work is better in people who eat healthy

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than people with bad eating habits. When

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problem of overweight extends to a bigger part of

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become a public health problem.

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, the government have to increase their investment in hospitals and treatments. In conclusion, countries with

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number of populations

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overweight have many troubles. As the statement

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the overweight is a serious problem which must be attacked

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the children until the elderly persons.