More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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80% of
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deaths are
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a consequence
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of bad eating habits. The
first
symptom of
this
bad alimentation is the overweight. From
this
, start to appear a huge number of diseases that affects the development of the persons, and they are more dangerous when the bad habits start in the
first
years of life. Analyzing the routines of some parents and the
arrive
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of fast foods to the school cafeteria, you can see two ways that have children to access
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these foods. The main cause of the
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of
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overweight is the
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of fast
food
.
This
type of
food
has too much sugar and fats, ingredients that have two impacts
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the body.
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hand, they increase the weight of the persons because they are not eliminated from the bodies,
as a result
of the
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of
fiber
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.
On the other hand
, these two ingredients create
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to aliments that
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. So, kids will want to eat
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and again, increasing the ingest of these bad foods. But the real question we can make is, why children
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eat
this
food
. And the answer could be the
next
.
For example
, some parents do not have too much time, so they
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buy fast
food
and avoid cooking healthy
food
. In the short term, that could be a good way to feed their kids, but in the long
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these
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food
causes a lot of illness in their bodies. Another answer is that
,
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the biggest companies spend a lot of money
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put their
food
in the schools, so
this
food
is gave
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to our kids from their
first
years. One of the effects is that the overweight leads to other health diseases, as
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diseases, high tension, liver and lung illness. In the case of
teenagers
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these illness carries
difficults
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difficult
difficulties
to study affecting their academic level. In adults, the performance in the work is better in people who eat healthy
food
than people with bad eating habits. When
this
problem of overweight extends to a bigger part of
population
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become a public health problem.
Therefore
, the government have to increase their investment in hospitals and treatments. In conclusion, countries with
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number of populations
in
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overweight have many troubles. As the statement
show
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the overweight is a serious problem which must be attacked
since
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the children until the elderly persons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • sedentary
  • caloric intake
  • processed foods
  • fast food culture
  • screen time
  • metabolic disorders
  • healthcare expenditure
  • lifestyle diseases
  • preventative strategies
  • nutritional education
  • public health policy
  • body mass index (BMI)
  • emotional well-being
  • stigmatization
  • exercise regimen
  • eating habits
  • junk food
  • socioeconomic factors
  • health literacy
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