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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways.others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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There were many arguments on financial budget investment towards transportation. One group of society argue the
expendature
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expenditure
 on railways will be
benificial
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beneficial
 and others will see more
benificial
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beneficial
 aspects toward
the new
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the construction of the new route
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routes
 construction. I believe the new pathways towards the rural areas will be more
benifical
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beneficial
 for both
nation
 and
people
.
Firstly
,
aroud
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around
 the
nation
 there were
lot
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a lot
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 of backward areas which doesn't
had
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have
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route
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a route
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 facility to drive through a
four wheeler
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four-wheeler
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 vehicle.
This
 is one of the
reason
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reasons
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 made rural
people
 stay away from modern society. Due to
this
 lack of route make them far from medical and educational facilities. If we want to make our
nation
 strong we
are suppose
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 to build new
routes
 by investing more.
Secondly
, the investment
on
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in
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 new
routes
 will allow
to connect
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connecting
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 rural
people
 with the urban society and they can sell
teire
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their
 goods on time. It will bump the
nation
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national
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 economy and
also
 the rural
people
 basic needs to
theire
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their
door steps
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doorsteps
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. As a
nation
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,nation
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 we can be proud when we provide
basis
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basic
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 needs to each and every corner of edges. Taking
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into considerations
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considerations
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consideration
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 of all the above statements I wousy ld investment towards new
routes
 will be more
helpfull
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helpful
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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