Some people think that governments should spend money on railways.others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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There were many arguments on financial budget investment towards transportation. One group of society argue the

expendature

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expenditure

on railways will be

benificial

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beneficial

and others will see more

benificial

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beneficial

aspects toward

the new

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the construction of the new route

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routes

construction. I believe the new pathways towards the rural areas will be more

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beneficial

for both

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and

people

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around

the

nation

there were

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of backward areas which doesn't

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route

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facility to drive through a

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vehicle.

This

is one of the

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made rural

people

stay away from modern society. Due to

this

lack of route make them far from medical and educational facilities. If we want to make our

nation

strong we

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to build new

routes

by investing more.

Secondly

, the investment

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new

routes

will allow

to connect

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rural

people

with the urban society and they can sell

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their

goods on time. It will bump the

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economy and

also

the rural

people

basic needs to

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their

door steps

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. As a

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we can be proud when we provide

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needs to each and every corner of edges. Taking

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considerations

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of all the above statements I wousy ld investment towards new

routes

will be more

helpfull

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helpful

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

198 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways.others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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you have been offered a job overseas that you applied for. Write a letter to your friend who is already knows about that job as well. .Tell what kind of job it is .explain why you applied for this job .ask your friend about the country

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreighn language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more people are using computers and electric devices to access information, therefore there is no need for printed books, magazines and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Technology)

In many countries, people now wear Western-style dresses such as suits and jeans rather than traditional clothing. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative development?