In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most of scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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companies are getting more involved in sponsoring and conducting scientific research than government agencies. Some people are amazed by these researches as they are efficient and less

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forever to be completed. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss

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approach are far more than merits.

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with, private organizations have the tendency to deliver all the

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without wasting any time. In order to make

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,happen they do exploit a large number of labour, once the final product is ready it will be delivered to the public at very high prices. Only affordable to the affluent members of the society.

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, when individual pharmaceutical associations run any medicinal research they launch these disease-fighting drugs at a very high cost, which they know the general public has no choice

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up buying to save their lives.

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era of privatization is not beneficial for the poor and average people of our locality.

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, these private businesses only think about their profit from every research they perform.

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kind of mindset could be very disastrous for the security and safety of the country.

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, if these private researchers sell their weapons or highly dangerous products to

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against the world and kill everyone in just a fraction of

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not very human-friendly,

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to major chaos among different nations.

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, the privatization of medical

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entire world in the fight against COVID-19 and its

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spread. Pfizer, Moderna, AstraZeneca and Johnson & Johnson are private companies that have discovered anti-viral drug shots to minimize the effect of the COVID-19 virus. So far, these immunization doses

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proven very successful

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pandemic.

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private and governmental

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has both positive and negative

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, but I personally believe the limitations of

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outweigh the benefits.

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, these private companies should only conduct

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with extra precautions that

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safety and peace.

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Ensure a more comprehensive response to the essay question by addressing both advantages and disadvantages of private companies conducting scientific research. Present clear and relevant examples to support your arguments and ensure that the introduction and conclusion adequately sum up the main points of the essay.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most of scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is a good trend, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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