In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most of scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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, it has been witnessed that
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companies are getting more involved in sponsoring and conducting scientific research than government agencies. Some people are amazed by these researches as they are efficient and less
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whereas
government
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forever to be completed. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss
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this
approach are far more than merits.
To begin
with, private organizations have the tendency to deliver all the
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without wasting any time. In order to make
this
,happen they do exploit a large number of labour, once the final product is ready it will be delivered to the public at very high prices. Only affordable to the affluent members of the society.
For instance
, when individual pharmaceutical associations run any medicinal research they launch these disease-fighting drugs at a very high cost, which they know the general public has no choice
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up buying to save their lives.
Thus
,
this
era of privatization is not beneficial for the poor and average people of our locality.
Moreover
, these private businesses only think about their profit from every research they perform.
This
kind of mindset could be very disastrous for the security and safety of the country.
For example
, if these private researchers sell their weapons or highly dangerous products to
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terrorists
then
they could use
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against the world and kill everyone in just a fraction of
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seconds
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.
Hence
,
these researches
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this research
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are
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not very human-friendly,
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can lead
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to major chaos among different nations.
On the other hand
, the privatization of medical
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has recently saved
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entire world in the fight against COVID-19 and its
further
spread. Pfizer, Moderna, AstraZeneca and Johnson & Johnson are private companies that have discovered anti-viral drug shots to minimize the effect of the COVID-19 virus. So far, these immunization doses
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proven very successful
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this
pandemic.
To conclude
,
the
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private and governmental
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researches
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has both positive and negative
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, but I personally believe the limitations of
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outweigh the benefits.
Therefore
, these private companies should only conduct
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with extra precautions that
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not
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others
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safety and peace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • groundbreaking technologies
  • efficiently allocate resources
  • innovative projects
  • strict timelines
  • profit motives
  • basic research
  • commercial application
  • corporate funding
  • biases in research
  • unbiased exploration
  • balanced exploration
  • public sector
  • private sector
  • synergy
  • comprehensive outcomes
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