In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

Nowadays, it is frequently said that
people
do not
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along with their
neighbours
compared with the past. In
this
essay, I
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will
try to find the reason why and
then
I will say what, in my opinion,
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people
can do for improving their
relationship
.
Firstly
I think that the most important thing is that the
people
must be positive and,
in addition
, they want to create a stronger contact with others who live close to them, in fact, sometimes, someone
decide
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to live alone, cutting off the
relationship
with other
people
.
Moreover
, I believe that in
the
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modern society there is a sense of independence from the rest of
community
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the community
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due to the fact that we are connected by
Internet
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the Internet
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and we do not need anymore a
fisical
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physical
contact like
the
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past years
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therefore
the
people
preferred to stay home
instead
of going out and talk with
neighbours
.
Although
the use of Internet decrease the social
relationship
, I think that it is important to improve a sense of community where you can join and,one example, could be the
naissance
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renaissance
of several initiatives among
people
who live in the same area, like football match or parties where they can meet and have fun
alltogheter
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altogether
. In conclusion, I believe that having a good
relationship
with
neighbours
is essential in light
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the fact that you can feel part of a group and for
this
reason, for the
next
years, it is important to improve the contact thanks to projects and where the
neighbours
can spent time and maybe become
friend
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a friend
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.
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