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With the coming of new Communication media like television and internet newspaper is losing its importance do you agree or not

#communication #media #television #internet #newspaper #importance
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Indeed technology had involved so much over
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 and
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now
People
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 can get every
information
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 on television thrown various channels and articles published on
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internet
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 and because of
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people
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 think that newspapers or no more useful . In the upcoming
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internet
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 is
most
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 useful source of
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person
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 can gather tonnes of knowledge from technological advancement . it is more convenient and new surprise and much
more
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faster whereas
newspaper
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 has to be printed on
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 basis so it takes Take some
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 to reach to
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 is where television play a vital role there is news coverage on channels and awareness About the activities going on in society .
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further more
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 you can get access to anything on
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internet
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by
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 one click and most
of
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the
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teenagers
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thing
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newspaper
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 waste a lot of
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 On the flipside
newspaper
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 is very useful in every manner children can develop
habit
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 of reading which will have
good
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 effect on long-term
people
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 are addicted to
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 from a long
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 and they read them on their daily basis there are very
less
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 chances of wrong
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 lakh sometimes the
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 is not correct and it is full of pornographic sites which children can assess easily the radiation from the phone can affect our eyesight To conclude
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 is not losing its importance it will continue because it is very cheap and whereas
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internet
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 have detrimental effects both have their own roles
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 and television
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 are important
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