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Some people say that TV advertisements are helpful for viewers, while other disagree. what is your opinion.

#people #tv #advertisements #viewers
Commercials
 are
great
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a great
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 way to promote a
product
 or even launch a new
product
 in
market
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. Many
people
 think
,
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 advertisements are in
favored
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 of
audience
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the audience
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 but some are against
of
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it. In my opinion,
commercials
 are in viewers support and in
this
 essay, I will discuss both views.
Firstly
, television
commercials
 are
the
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a
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 fantastic method to give information about the
product
for example
, if some company is bringing a phone or
a
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next
 series of
existed
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the existed
an existed
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phone
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phones
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 in the market, TV
adds
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ads
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 can give them the platform to exhibit the phone appearance or features.
Secondly
,
commercials
 could promote small
business
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businesses
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also
 and become helpful to establish
it
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them
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.
flourishing
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 of businesses is
vital
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a vital
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 part
for
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 any countries economic growth. sometimes TV
commercial
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commercials
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 are very useful to educate
people
 about situations
for
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,for
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 instance, government airs
commercial
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commercials
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 about income tax dates or
health related
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health-related
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 information, to aware
people
about
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of
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 it.
however
, some commercial
are
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is
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 about a
product
 which reveals too much, some person finds uncomfortable, especially, when they are sitting with their children. Occasionally company broadcast their
product
 many times in a day to invade
in
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consumer’s
mind
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minds
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 even their
product
 is not worthy. Along with that,
usually
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people
 finds advertisement invasive into a program. In my view,
commercials
 make aware
about
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of
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 products and can help to compare in
market
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the market
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 which is good for consumers. To conclude, many
viewer
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viewers
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 finds advertisement very educative and easy way to communicate a mass about some ongoing situation.
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