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In some countries, imported food is increasingly popular. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times, more foreign foods are imported in some notions, becoming a popular option for consumers.
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, I believe that the drawbacks of
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 trend outweigh the benefits. One primary reason is the fact that imported
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 threatens the local agricultural industries. People are more likely to choose to purchase foreign
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 than local
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, and
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 it influences the profit of the local
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 industries.
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, a large amount of greenhouse gas is emitted, which lead to air pollution. Imported
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 is transported by aeroplanes and ships which emit lots of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gas.
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 is the main cause of environmental problems.
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, once people are familiar with foreign
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, their eating habits will change.
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, there are some benefits of
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 trend.
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 with, imported
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 provides a wide variety of choices for consumers, so local people can consume different diets every day.
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,
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 shortage in some countries might be solved by transporting foreign cuisines. Some notions have
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 shortage problems because of their poor agricultural development or lack of funds, and
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 importing
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 from other countries might be an effective way to prevent the local
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 deficiency. By way of conclusion,
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 there are some advantages of imported
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, I believe that the disadvantages of
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 trend needed more awareness of the public. Governments should focus on these issues
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 as threatening the local agricultural industries, greenhouse gas emissions, and changing residents' eating habits and figure out resolutions to tackle them.
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