Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement.Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

Looking towards highly socioeconomic disparity, there have been efforts made by professionals by implementing
uniforms
for children at
school
. While some says
school
uniforms
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students
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basis are rather worth than need to express individuality.
To begin
with,
school
uniform makes
school
a safer place for
students
, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes.
Uniforms
can be treated as
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identity to promote positivity which
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students
to have the same
school
spirit. In our society,
uniforms
have always been used to promote ideas and belongings. There is
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why
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own
uniforms
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formal dress code, every quiz competition
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by their own set of
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. In
this
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students
can
also
be focused on their studies rather than appearances.
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attire provides
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transparency in the campus and gives equal treatment to every individual despite
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their economic background. On other hand, some people think that
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have
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to express their individuality. They can experiment with their clothing and accessories. Having
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dress code limits their creativity to convey themselves. Going
further
, there have been scenarios evidenced that children from some schools have
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been violently
targeted easily with the help of
uniforms
. In conclusion,
although
both of the sides have winning content, I would like to go with the uniform as it is
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, helps prevent
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to feel less confident based on how they dress and of course it’s convenient to
students
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parents.
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