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Increasing number of developing countries are expanding tourist industries. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays, many
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 are contributing to their
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 development. The tourist industry is considered the main tax revenue source of these
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, it has many reasons to promote it. As we know, many less developed
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 have sufficient unexploited natural resources,
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 as islands, jungles and mysterious wildlife habitats. As a developing country, opening the gate of these rare primitive natural places for visitors from all over the world is the most efficient approach to boost the country’s well-known along with increase national GDP. On positive aspects, developing
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 not well-off regions can help society increase job opportunities and people’s income. In that case,reducing poverty and boosting economic growth is not a fantasy for less productive areas.
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, the exploitation of the attractive site in these
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 provides access to travel lovers from all over the world to watch the diversity of culture and magnificent natural scenery,
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 giving a new horizon to understand the
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 of these
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, some negative effects cannot be avoided because of the fragile and vulnerable features of the less exploited environment in many developing
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. The destruction of the natural environment could become more severe due to overdeveloped
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. The construction and deforestation for developing tourist industries, the rising green gas emissions from visitors’ carbon footprints and many other human activities, bringing serious damage to the local ecosystem.
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, it might cause irreversible effects to these
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 harmful to long-term benefits. To conclude, the expansion of
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 is a positive trend to boosting economic growth in developing
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, the governments should have the awareness that does not overdevelop tourist industries in order to protect the precious natural resources for the long-term development of
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