Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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Many people have the opinion that having a set
retirement
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age
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for each and every person regardless of their job, is unfair. They
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have a strong
believe
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that
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certain
range of workers should retire early and get
pension
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a pension
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at
earlier
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age
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. As
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total argument is true, I will illustrate my opinion below.
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, a set
retirment
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retirement
age
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is very uncertain and unfair as they are many kinds of jobs , all those jobs
donot
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do not
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support the same time
retriement
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retirement
, As some
work
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is
physically
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and mental
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. So it is always varied from
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to
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.
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, My father is
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school teacher as he is
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working
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20 years, his vocal chord is
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deliberately
affected and
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he's not able
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talk as he would earlier. In
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is
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in
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it
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should be a necessary option to have
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eariler
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earlier
retirement
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and should initiate
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early pension. My father got the justice as it is a serious problem is got the
retirement
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at the
age
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of 45.
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, Workers with more physical pressure should be
benifited
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benefited
from
retirement
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. Physical
work
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that includes the construction business in which the people will have more stress as compared to the government
employs
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employees
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. The hospital
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should
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be supported.
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, as cricketers will have before time retiral from
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, as they cannot
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as
effective
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as they
work
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below the
age
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of 30, so the maximum
age
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will only be
upto
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up to
35 years
age
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and after the retiral
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age
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they will be given other jobs which are suitable in that given year. The conclusion, I definitely agree that 65 years
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age
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of age
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is
to
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too
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suitable
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all sorts of works. Professions like Teachers and Police officers and others
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should provide an early pension
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it will be fair in all aspects.
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