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Some people believe that money is the most important factor for achieving happiness. However others believe that happiness has nothing to do with money. Agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 considered
money
 as a significant element to accomplish
happiness
.
Although
, others opinion is that
money
 and wealth
has
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have
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 no connection with delight in
life
. Some
people
 say
money
 can buy
happiness
. I personally believe that being happy and
happiness
 have various
definition
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definitions
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 in every
persons
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person's
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life
. Overall, I strongly agree with
this
 notion that
money
 plays a key role of joy and help to create the conditions for being happy. According to the connection between
the
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money
 and
happiness
, in my
assumption
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,assumption
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 it depends on how you spend the
money
.
For example
,
people
 are happier when spending
money
 on experiences
instead
 of things. Experiences stay in our memories. like going to concerts or
traveling
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. While others donate
money
 to charity or buy someone a gift to have a feeling of
happiness
. On the other side of the argument, there are
people
 who believe that
money
 has nothing to do with
happiness
. Nowadays because of inflation and crisis all over the
world
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 the definition of
happiness
 has changed to having
money
. Some
people
 do not have
money
 to save it. They just have to work hard because of their requirements in their personal
life
. They do not know anything about
happiness
 and joy, they just work
for
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to
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make
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making
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 a living.
However
, I know some
people
they
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who
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 are seriously rich but are disappointed and rarely did they experienced
the
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apply
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happiness
.
For instance
, the family lost their child because of an illness,
money
 does not have any value because the heartbreak of his mother and father cannot be wiped through
the
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financial aid. Even though,
money
 gives lots of benefits to
people
 in terms of their position and lifestyle. To summarize, in my
opinion
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 I personally believe that according to the different definition of
happiness
,
money
make
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makes
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 sense to personal
life
 but it should not relate just
money
 as an important factor for accomplish. It relies on the way that others spend
money
.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with the notion that
happiness
 has
relation
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a relation
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 to
money
.
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