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Information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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Introduction
Internet
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 is a groundbreaking invention that has
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 life. Numerous people use
information
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of
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 media and it shapes our thinking in day to day life.
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, nowadays it has
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 created some issues.
Body paragraph 1
The ample drawbacks of the
internet
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is
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 heading towards
children
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. They can access
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various and dangerous
sites
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 easily. There are many inappropriate websites on the
internet
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 without limitation.
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, the most dangerous applications
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 as
kik
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,
tumblr
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, Instagram and etceteras are detrimental for
children
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 and even teens.
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,
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online games are easily accessible to
children
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. Some of the
Sites
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 and games
provides
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violence
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 content that has affected
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their thoughts and development, which is a negative impact
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 the
children
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 and for society. Another major problem is
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internet
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 addiction for adults. One of the
fact
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 about
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addiction
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 is, many people
taking
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 away from something else to surf the
internet
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. It
is become
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 unmanageable.
Body paragraph 2
It is important that action is taken to conflict these problems. Parents play a central role
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this
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 kind of
issues
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. They should control
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 activities of their
children
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 and restrict their access to certain
sites
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. Every person should have allocates the specific time for unnecessary things that trap them to use the
sites
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 every time and try to manage it.
Conclusion
To conclude, in
this
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 advanced world, usage of
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internet
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 changes to a vital element in our daily life. According to online
education
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 most of the systems and companies tend to use
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internet
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 more than before. But it has
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touches
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 on issues and make a safe place for everyone.

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