Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that it’s more beneficial to take part in
sports
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which are played in
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team
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a team
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like football, other
people
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believe that it’s better to participate in individual
sports
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like tennis or swimming.
Personally
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i
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agree with the
first
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group. There are some
people
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think that take part in individual
sports
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have more advantage.
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,
people
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who play solo
sports
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such
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as tennis or swimming have the opportunity to develop independence. They have no one to help them during the game, so they can develop independent thinking and make their own decisions.
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,
people
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who choose
team
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sports
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will receive support from their members, which could discourage them
to
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developing these
skill
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. Another reason is that
player
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players
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in solo
sports
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need to try hard and perfect their personal skill to
achive
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achieve
their goals
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,
i
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choose to participate in
sports
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which are played in
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a team
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team
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teams
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like football because these
sports
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teach their
players
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player's
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valuable life lessons, something that solo players can’t get.
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with football, players who play these
game
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games
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need to work effectively in a
team
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environmet
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environment
and they must sacrifice themselves for the sake of
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team
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the team
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.
Team
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sports
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teach
people
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about leadership which is one of the most important
skill
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today So,
people
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say we should choose to play individual
sports
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but
i
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believe
thet
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that
team
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sport will better
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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