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In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles would be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Admittedly, there are some disadvantages associated with
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 could be vulnerable to cybercrime
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 Because all of these machines use the same source of information and navigation, if black-hat hackers decide to destroy them while creating chaos in society, a cyber attack on the servers will enable them not only to control
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 but
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 can disrupt some police activities,
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 as prosecuting criminals. Another issue is that by the widespread use of driverless automobiles in the public transportation systems and industry many people lose their jobs. The more these
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 are used, the greater the rate of unemployment of taxi, bus, and industrial car driver drivers.
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, these problems could be solved if governments seek viable ways to create job opportunities and enhance the firewalls against hackers.
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, these new phenomena would be considered beneficial.
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, trips could be more enjoyable if all
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 a car, not even one of them have to pay attention to driving duties. They can watch the scenery while drinking and talking with their friends all the length of the road.
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, fatigue caused by long driving may result in some violation of essential roles
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 as driving recklessly while driverless
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 can reduce these problems and can be avoidable, meaning that arriving at the destination in a relaxing state is possible.
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, self-driving
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 combine a variety of sensors to perceive their surroundings
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 as radar, internal measurement units, GPS, the global positioning system, and so on. These facilities empower them to control traffic jams and the risk of accidents. In conclusion, it is clear that driverless vehicles would be surprisingly positive because journeys would be more pleasant and car smashes would be reduced.
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, some stumbling blocks should be solved by authorities.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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