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Some people want to live in a house while others prefer living in an apartment. Does living in a house bring more advantages than living in an apartment?

#people #house #apartment
People have very specific preferences where dwelling facilities are concerned. These preferences are built on the basis of
size
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 of family, monthly income and similar needs. The decision of living in a
house
 or an apartment is made based on these preferences and each has its own pros and cons. According to
me
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, living in a
house
 is better as compared to living in an apartment.
Houses
 have more carpet and
built up
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 areas. They have relatively spacious and
well lit
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rooms
 which brightens the mood on entry into the
house
. The number of
rooms
 can vary but are usually between 5 to 6. Every item has
an accurately allocated spaces
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an accurately allocated space
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 according to the
storage
 conditions.
For instance
, many
houses
 have walk-in closets
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for
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foe
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for
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storage
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the storage
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 of clothes and shoes. All facilities necessary for
storage
 of these like hangers, shoe racks are provided in
this
 closet. The
bunglows
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bungalows
 mostly have gardens which
impplies
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implies
 that the children in the family have space to play and if the owners are willing they can have pet animals.
Houses
also
 have dedicated car garages for the
residents
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resident's
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 cars.
Hence
bunglows
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bungalows
 come
accross
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across
 as more grand than apartments.
However
, the downside of the grandeur is that people have to spend
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substantial
substancial
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a substancial
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 amount of money
for
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on
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maintenance
maintainence
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 of the
house
. Apartments are smaller in
area
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the area
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 as compared to
bunglows
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bungalows
. They are low
maintainence
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maintenance
accomodation
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accommodation
 spaces which
also
 help you to learn to value the space you have. Most items in a flat will be multipurpose
storage
 places. Residents of apartments rely on each other for help and support which is rarely seen in occupants of
houses
. The cons of residing in a flat
are
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 that too much furniture will cause crowding. Limited space means that
limited
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a limited
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 number of guests can be invited.
Also
, there is no guarantee that your building will have a dedicated parking lot.
For example
, I live in
an
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 flat system. We have four
rooms
 which are occupied by necessary cooking, cleaning,
storage
 and relaxation spaces. Yet it looks extremely crowded when compared to my
uncles
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uncle's
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house
 which has 5
rooms
. The
rooms
 are huge and do not look cramped up in spite of having similar amounts of items and objects around. To conclude, after considering all the points, the advantages of living in a
house
 outweigh the advantages of living in an apartment
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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