Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think that it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The graph shows the
number
of gym membership based on the genders over a span of thirty years, from 1980 to 2010. Overall, there was an upward trend in female membership which fluctuated over the
period
shown.
On the other hand
, the
number
of male
members
fluctuated widely, being higher than the
female
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during
this
period
apart from in the
last
decade of the twentieth century and 2007 afterwards. In the
first
year of
this
period
, we can see that the
number
of men holding gym membership was twice as many
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as the
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figure
for women.
This
figure
had more than doubled five years on, with 4000 men joining the gym. It
then
plummeted to around 1800 in 1995. After a few years levelling out at almost the same rate, there was a dramatic increase, reaching the all-time high 5000 in 2005.
However
, from
then
on,
this
plunged to a record low of about 800. Turning to the figures for women
members
, the
number
had trebled by 1995, increasing from 1000 to approximately 3000 and having the greatest
number
of
members
as opposed to men in 1995. At
this
point
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this
dropped steadily to almost 2000, but
then
it went back up to the same
figure
for 1995 in 2005. By the end of the
period
in question, in 2010,
this
number
had declined gradually to roughly 2000, which was still twice as many the
figure
for the
first
year of the given time frame.
Moreover
, in 2010, the
number
of male
members
was half as many
the
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as the
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Correct quantifier usage
number of female
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female
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females
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  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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