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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree and disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
After preschool and before university, we have just single-sex education in my country, so based on my experience, maybe I'm a good candidate to discuss the advantages and disadvantages. In the beginning, the problem with children who educate in one single-sex
school
 begins with they being isolated in
school
. I mean, they can't socialise with the opposite gender. In my eyes, the
school
 should reflect real life.
Hence
, in real life we work together, we live together, apart from
this
 aspect, they especially boys get stuck on their stereotype which is willing to do things based on what society expects from them, without considering their talent or opinion and
this
 situation
also
 true for girls. We have less evidence about the advantages of single-sex education;
however
, I can mention some of them. Boys and girls will be less under pressure, or they won't have to worry about saving face in front of the opposite gender; on top of that they can easily talk about topics which are not controversial issues;
therefore
, it's possible that they can be themselves in their class, apart from
this
,
this
 kind of
school
 may be a good choice for a parent who has a religious background.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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